First Showing + Feedback

Today we had the first showing of our music videos and received feedback from the rest of the group.

One of the biggest bits of feedback I received was to add another element nearer the beginning that would balance out the day-time and dark elements already in the video. 

I have not yet decided if this new element will be filmed on location or in my garage again but I have had an idea to have the artist filming herself sing into the camera in a hand-held style.

Feedback: Digipack

Today I created 3 audience feedback sheets to get feedback on the two digipack designs that I created yesterday.

The feedback received has decided upon digipack one. This was not my favourite during the drawing stages as I preferred the effect on the cover of Digipack two. I will however listen to the feedback as that is the more popular of the two designs. 

Feedback from Nina

"Hi Ryan. I wanted to give you some feedback on the work on your blog thus far and what a treat it has been to see such mature and diligent work. You are clearly really enjoying this project and your posts show passion, commitment and a depth of engagement. I really like your digi-pack analysis work and I would like you to start posting Photoshop print screens of the work you are doing in your digi-pack development. I agree with Leanne about your animatic and think it would benefit from a second location performance element. You must be explicit about linking everything you do and the decisions and revisions you make back to the institutional context of your video and try to weave in the theories of Goodwin, Adorno and Keith Negus into your analysis of process, decsisions and developments. I would like to see you get some original location shots and explore intertextual referencing in more detail as I think there is huge filmic potential in your promo to pay homage to some key cinematic moments either stylistically or visually. This is all looking really positive Ryan and I am so pleased that you are updating your blog regularly and doing all the homework I have set to a high standard. Thank you for your efforts and keep up the great work but make sure you act upon the advice that Leanne and I give. I have no doubt you will."

This is the feedback that was given to me by one of my teachers on how to improve my blog so far. The key point I have drawn from this is that I need to use more theories to explain the developments I make during the process.
I have also been further advised that a second performance element would help to benefit my music video as the original performance element does become a little repetitive and predictable towards the end.

Animatic Feedback

• Good generally-    Good 1st shot
• Few places where shot is held too long
• Add another location for performance shots 2/3 way through
• 'hand on tree' shot too long

I will be looking into ideas for the second performance element of the video. One idea would be to bring back the projection idea that was originally thought of when finding ideas for the performance elements within the video.

This second performance element could be brought in around 2:46 near the close of the song just after the artist has 'transformed' in the narrative piece.

The 'hand on tree shot will now be cut down from six seconds to two seconds and will feature one or two new shots from 1:28-1:32.

Feedback from Leanne

Above is the feedback given to me by my teacher 

on how to improve my blog.

The majority of the feedback I have been given is generally positive, commenting on my analysis and depth of progress. I was also praised for my use of Prezi and Glogster for my Mood Board and Artist Brief.

There are however some negatives. This includes the lack of visual labels [since been fixed by adding the labels gadget] and also feedback asking add images or more explanation to posts, such as my Prezi Mood Board. I was also questioned about the image layout in some of my analysis posts which I shall be looking at and hopefully changing depending on whether Blogger allows me to move the images freely. 

Feedback: Logo

Today I created 3 audience feedback sheets to get feedback on the two logo designs that I created yesterday.

Luckily the feedback that I have got agree with the choice that I wanted to make for the logo and have picked logo 1 and the accompanying diamond.